-<div class="about-text"><?php printf( __( 'Thank you for updating to the latest version! Using WordPress %s will improve your looks, personality, and web publishing experience. Okay, just the last one, but still. :)' ), $display_version ); ?></div>
+<div class="about-text"><?php printf( __( 'Thank you for updating to the latest version. WordPress %s makes your writing experience even better.' ), $display_version ); ?></div>